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A poem by me

Post by Grimmjow on Mon Oct 11, 2010 9:28 pm

In The Time Before Man

In the time before man
Way back long ago
There was a land
That few people know.

There were jets of water
That came out of the ground
Accompanied by vapor
And a great roaring sound.

Swift running rivers
That flowed very fast
Around mountains they slithered
What a long time they would last.

I visited that place
A couple years back
The wonder on my face
When there wasn’t a drawback.

The waterfalls were majestic
The forests were great
The geysers were scenic
The bison were ornate.

After seeing such sights
I made up my mind
To save such sites
And to wildlife be kind.
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Post by LJTyyy on Mon Oct 11, 2010 9:32 pm

BRAVO BRAVO BRAVO good poem good poem ty and i always will be kind to wild life :]
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Post by SacredAssassin on Mon Oct 11, 2010 9:33 pm

You have the rhyming down, and the descriptions are very well done.

Question: Out of curiosity, does the poem have to rhyme?

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Post by Grimmjow on Tue Oct 12, 2010 6:06 pm

SacredAssassin wrote:You have the rhyming down, and the descriptions are very well done.

Question: Out of curiosity, does the poem have to rhyme?

No, but it's better that way Very Happy
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Post by ShadowElite on Tue Dec 28, 2010 7:18 am

=D

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Re: A poem by me

Post by noobesc on Wed Dec 29, 2010 3:54 am

touche...

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Post by Chernobyl on Wed Dec 29, 2010 5:14 am

This was yours???? You sound like a mix between Walt Whitman and Sun Tsu.
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Post by Grimmjow on Thu Dec 30, 2010 12:28 am

Chernobyl wrote:This was yours???? You sound like a mix between Walt Whitman and Sun Tsu.
Lolwut. If its a mix then its obviously mine.
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Post by PwndYOU4Life on Thu Dec 30, 2010 4:16 pm

nice peom : D

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Post by Grimmjow on Fri Dec 31, 2010 12:51 pm

Thanks Very Happy
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Post by Diluted on Wed Sep 11, 2013 7:36 am

Nice

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